Hello, author of 5 mistakes post here! I read your listing and have a few suggestions for you.
1: Title - Your title is rather generic and not very exciting. Think about what can hook a sitter straight away by using your title to explain exactly what is on offer for them. For example ‘Explore Wolverhampton and the West Midlands’ or something along those lines.
2: pictures - you have some repeating pictures of the pets, and many images of the same rooms at different (and sometimes not ideal) angles. These are unnecessary and can be removed. There are also images of bunnies with food and muck on them, and their litter spread around. This may put sitters off, as there seems to be rabbit droppings all over the floor of the main living area in many images, which doesn’t really go down well for a sit. Stick to images of the bunnies in a clean area (like photos 21 and 26) and perhaps consider clearly explaining where exactly the rabbits go to the bathroom?
3: Intro.
At the moment your intro reads very much like an autobiography, which does little to tell sitters exactly why they should choose your sit over someone else’s. What are you offering a sitter? What is there to see and do in the area? To be honest, sitters don’t often care why you are going away on holiday and about your family members, etc - they would rather know why they should pick you and what is on offer for them.
4: Home and location.
This section has some nice descriptions but is a little long and can be condensed. Try using dot points to briefly describe your home rather than paragraphs. Remember your listing is an advert and brief overview only.
5: Responsibilities section:
Not bad, but would be helpful for sitters if you put responsibilities into simple dot points rather than paragraphs. You also don’t mention anything anything about cat and bunny litter - with 2 cats and 3 rabbits, sitters may be wondering how many litter trays there are, etc. You also do not mention anything about the fish, though you have fish listed.
Hope that helps!